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SciFi and Fantasy Stories: The Being of the Vampire

I think the title explains it enough

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    Sub-categories:   Vampires      Undead  

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I can feel the smooth skin of their necks,
Staring at the protruding veins.

I can feel the blood coursing through their veins,
Hearing their heart beating a mile away.

I can feel their fear in my head with delight,
Smelling the sweet fragrance of their blood.

I can feel their skin brush against my lips,
Tasting the fullness of their blood as I drink.

I can feel their heart slowing,
Feeling their blood as it now courses through my veins.

I can feel the sorrow of their souls,
Realizing the truth of what it means to be a vampire.
 
 

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1 Jul 200345 Angelic_eyez <smellybell
This is a great poem, it really does catch the inner termoil of a vampire, the way they think and how they really feel, you have caught the sorrowful side of a vampire not just the typical 'biting people and going around saying corny dracula lines' side this is a great piece, keep up the great work!!!
1 Jul 2003:-) Melanie J. Teichroeb
Splendiferous! I lurve vamps ^_^ keep up the good work!
1 Jul 200345 Azrael angel of death
Truly vampiric it leaves something however perhaps you should do another more on the vampires iner perception?
1 Jul 200345 Clara Aden
Utterly haunting. Great Job with the wording and work.
2 Jul 2003:-) Esmeralda Eli
wow!! that was excellent! It does deserve to be MODS choice! I love the words you chose in the poem! Keep up the good work!

1 Matthew Scott Jernstadt replies: "Thank you."
10 Aug 200345 Miguel Francis Ettema
It's dark, it's morbid, and somewhat disturbing. Congrats on the mod's choice, but I have to admit it's not the type of thing that really does it for me :/
12 Sep 200345 Amber
You have beautiful insight.
And as for the person who commented on grammar; I think you're right, it's the feeling, the imagery that people see, not how many words in a verse or the lines on a page, or anything else supposedly 'correct'.
I think... The poem's sincere and there's something there, in the words, that evokes such equisite empathy.
That's a rare thing to have...
10 Oct 200545 Anonymous
Aye, coming from a vampire myself, a bloody good job. A bit unrealistic, but still very good
28 Sep 200645 Anonymous
I thought the wording was awkward and redundant. It lacks poetic flow. But you convey your theme nicely.
15 Jul 2008:-) Svenja M Vox
So sad, made me sad...mental picture, although a bit murky. It could be longer, but this is a good length.

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